Saturday, May 2, 2015

Poem 3/3

Original:
The Man
Yesterday I met a strange man
He offered me candy and said, "Hop in the van."
But no way; I'm not stupid!
He must have thought I was clueless.
I imagined my mother saying, "Run as fast as you can!"

Revision:
The Man
Today I was approached by a strange man.
He offered me candy and said, "Hop in the van."
But no way; I'm not stupid!
He must of thought I was clueless
And with that, I grabbed my bag and ran.

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